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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart reveals the
electricity
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production
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 and
consumption
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 in
top
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 ten leading countries in 2014. In general, the amount of
electricity
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 generated and used in China and the United States was far higher than that in other countries. It was
also
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 noticeable that Germany was the only country that consumed more
electricity
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 than it produced. As can be seen from the chart, China had by far the greatest amount of
electricity
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production
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 at 5,398
billion
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kWh
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 and
consumption
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 at 5,322
billion
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kWh
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. It was followed by the United States with 4,099
billion
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kWh
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 in
production
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 and 3,866
billion
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kWh
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 in
consumption
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.
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, Korea only produced 485.1
billion
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kWh
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 and used 449.5
billion
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kWh
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, which was the smallest
figures
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of
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 the ranking. Meanwhile, Russia recorded mostly equal amount of
electricity
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production
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 and
consumption
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, which was just over 1,000
billion
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kWh
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. Japan produced and used more
electricity
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 than India, but their figures did not exceed 1,000
billion
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kWh
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. Looking at the other countries, their
electricity
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production
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 and
consumption
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 ranged from over 450
billion
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kWh
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 to over 600
billion
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kWh
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. It was interesting to note that Germany
generaged
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generated
 526.6
billion
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kWh
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 but used 582.5
billion
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kWh
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, consumption, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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