Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford.What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem

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Nowadays people are choosing to their desires and usually they are being competitive and jealous of whom is better than them in life. They often miss out what they actually need, but just focus on what they have to compare with others. That's why some people get into bad debt by many ways. Since their desires are too much so they just want what other has.

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, a person with all about jealousy and

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looking at someone who richer than him and owning so many assets. He will definitely start to compare and want all the things that the latter has, but actually he has nothing since he is not as rich as the one. That's why he needs to loan some amount of money to buy things that he cannot afford at

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, and it leads to bad debts as he cannot repay any debts.

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behaviour is so badly done as he has too much

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and ambitious which cause him bad consequences. According to Buddha, people are having three biggest things that need to be eliminated, there are greed, hatred and ignorance. Greed is a form of

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and

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the cause of suffering a great misery. One way that people can remove

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great misery is practising how to calm down when

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coming up on people's mind. Another way to prevent getting into debts is not buying things on credit and do not buy things that you know you cannot afford it. Avoiding loan some debts that you cannot repay. People who are giving loan need to consider the person that lend your money can repay or not. If they can repay your money after lending so let they lend, but if not,

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you should not allow them to lend even a dollar. In conclusions, you have lend people some things and definitely you have to repay the same things, that's is one of the rules in life which you cannot deniable.

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, just doing something that you can and avoid things that you cannot.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

344 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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You are invited to a party, however, because of some reasons you didn’t attend. Write a letter to the friend who invites you: (1) explain the reason why you didn’t go; (2) express your apology; (3) ask about some details in the party.

Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.