Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction.. Do you agree or disagree?.

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Some people believe that the best amount of wage is really important than the
satisfaction
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of the job. According to me. I partially agree with
this
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idea because we need
good
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a good salary
salary
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to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
our variety of needs and
also
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we should be satisfied about our professional
life
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. In
this
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essay, I will explain my point of view why we need good
salary
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and
satisfaction
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to be
success
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successful
as an employee. As human beings, we do many things to own
satisfaction
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.
Satisfaction
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is more important because of it gives more advantages to our
life
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as well as company or department where we work.
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, as a teacher, if I am not satisfied about my school, my
salary
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or my colleagues I cannot be successful at the school.
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, I unable to build a good relationship with the students and my team.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
I cannot provide my service properly to students.
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, my student will get less performance in my subject. That's why I believe people need
satisfaction
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in their
career
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careers
to be successful and effective. To build job
satisfaction
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need skill, good income, good
relationship among
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relationship, among
other coworker and it depends on personality too.
On the other hand
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the big
salary
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provides us
number
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a number
of benefits. If we have good
income we can
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income, we can
easily buy what we need for our
life
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.
nowadays
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Nowadays
, people need more and more money for
achieve
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achieving
achieves
their
life
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goals.
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, if someone
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has
good monthly
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a good monthly salary
salary
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he or she can provide good educational facilities for his or her children. The
salary
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is mainly affect
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is mainly affecting
has mainly affected
mainly affects
people when they choose their profession.
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, some people decide
choose
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to choose
their profession only thinking about
salery
something that remunerates
salary
celery
salaries
.
This
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situation make stress and it
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affects
our personal
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life health
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life, health
and our society too. According to
me I
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me, I
believe that both
salary
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and
satisfaction
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important to
successful
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a successful life
life
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. In conclusion, certain individuals think that high wages is
important
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more important
than that of satisfactory.. I trust both high
salary
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and
satisfaction
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of
carrier
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carrying
similarly
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in essential to be successful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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