The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart illustrates the data of Australian
men
and women doing regular exercises across six age
groups
in the year of
2010.
In general, there are relatively more Australian women were more dominant in Change preposition
apply
to have
regular Change the verb form
having
workout
Fix the agreement mistake
workouts
working
out regularly than Australian Correct word choice
and working
men
. The age
group
of 45 -54 was the most active group
among women, while
the age
group
of 15-24 was the most active group
among men
.
Besides
the male age
group
of 15-24, almost all the female age
groups
were more active than men
in all other age
groups
Remove the redundancy
apply
age
groups
. Interestingly, among the female, the middle age
groups
were the most active ones in doing exercises working out. that 53.5% and 53% demonstrated in the age
groups
of 45-54 and 55-64 respectively. Also
, However
, the youngest and eldest female groups
showed a low level of doing exercise on a regular basis which stood at approximately 47%.
In stark contrast, among the male, the teenage group
(15-24 age
group
) did the highest level of sports working out, and it was the
they were the only Remove the article
apply
group
that has
had over 50%. The two Unnecessary verb
apply
less
least active Correct quantifier usage
apply
groups
belonged to 25-34 and 35-44, the record stood at merely nearly 42.2% and 39.5% respectively. The activity level of the latter age
group
is has
approximately 10% less than that of Unnecessary verb
apply
female
Add an article
the female
group
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