My name is Peeyush Saxena and I am a working as development manager in XYZ company at Gurgaon location. This mail is with regard to the opening of management role in your company which was placed on vacancy board last week.

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development manager in XYZ company at Gurgaon location.

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as I was on leave for a week before that. I see myself a suitable candidate for the job and would like to apply for it. And please let me know if more information is required from my end. My mail id is [email protected]

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response. Your sincerely, Peeyush Saxena

Sun Feb 09 2020

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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166 words

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My name is Peeyush Saxena and I am a working as development manager in XYZ company at Gurgaon location. This mail is with regard to the opening of management role in your company which was placed on vacancy board last week.

Fully explain your ideas

Nowaways, more teenagers want to become famous actors or singers. Why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or negative development?

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