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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Is it significant to
dress
 up “properly” in a working environment or just the productivity matters? Many organisations would agree that the employees should
dress
 smartly but a plenty just value the quality of
work
Suggestion
the work
 above appearance.
This
 essay will discuss the importance of both the views. Team spirit, confidence and
discipline
 are the three most important factors in an organisation and it is believed by many that a proper
dress
 up or even uniforms (in some cases) contribute to these factors to a great extent. When all the employees are well dressed or dressed in a same type of attire, it gives them confidence, creates an impression of a team and at the same time when they see it as a rule, it creates
discipline
. Organisations working in the fields
such
 as security, medical, law enforcement etc. Where teamwork and
discipline
 plays a key role, a uniform or proper
dress
 up has great significance. There are many organisations
today which
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today, which
 have accepted a new free culture, where there is no pressure on their employees to
dress
 up in a certain way. They can wear whatever they want as long as they are productive. The biggest example for
this
 is ‘Google Inc.’
offices
Suggestion
Offices
, where the employees
dress
 and sit as they please but still the productivity of
this
 company cannot be defined in words. Not imposing a certain style of attire on the employees makes them more relaxed and think freely as they don’t feel burdened by all the rules and regulations. To conclude, smart
dress
 ups can be useful in some fields where teamwork and
discipline
 is the to
p priority b
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priority, but
ut in my opinion, in most othe
r cases
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cases, if
if dressing up smartly is not imposed on the employees, it can increase their productivity greatly
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