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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart provides the idea of how New
Zealand
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Zealand's
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 mortality rate
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 from 1901 and 2101. The difference between the two data has been significantly visible from 1901 up to 2101
where
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when
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birthrate
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the birthrate
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 increased slowly until 1941 shoots up
on
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in
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 1961 and drastically decreased.
Death
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The death
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 toll has been consistently growing
from
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since
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 2061 and
stay
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stayed
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 the same until 2101. The government will review its program in determining its cause and interventions to come up with
the
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apply
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solutions to eliminate the scarcity of workforce and
populations
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population
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 demand.
Death
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The death
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 toll is overtaking the number of newborns
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