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The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
Population
 has been a tremendous factor in a country’s development.
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A summary
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 of Japan’s
population
in
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earlier, now and in the future has been provided.
This
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about
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the variations in japans community in different time scales. The crowd level of the country is least in past with only about 84.1
million
people
 and there is an extensive increase
of
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population
 between 1990 to 2015 with less deviation. The elevated level of
people
 was from 123.6 to 125.4
million
 in
25years
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25 years
. Inhabitants
shows
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 a sudden drop of
15million
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15 million
 persons
at
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in
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 2035.
After
this
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 the Citizen count
tend
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 to decrease to
89.9million
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89.9 million
 almost similar to the earlier 1950s. The data showed
percentage
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the percentage
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 of the
people
 aged
65years
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65 years
 or over is 4.9%
withy
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with
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 4.1
million
 headcounts in 1950 and there will be a dramatic uplift to 41% in future with
36.5million
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36.5 million
 champs. The society’s
people
 count increase could lead to increased demands for
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food and other resources.
This
 can be controlled by birth control measures that should be taken by the government.
To conclude
 Japan’s
population
 will be extended in upcoming years and measures have to be carried out to control it.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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