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The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows how the populations of
India
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 and
China
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 have changed since 2000 and how they will change in the future. In 2000, there were more people living in
China
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 than in
India
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. The number of Chinese was 1.25
bill ion
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billion
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,
while
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India
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's
population
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 was about 1
billion
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. Between 2000 and the present, there has been a 0.2
billion
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 rise in the number of Indian citizens. Over the same period,
China
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's
population
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 has increased by 0.1
billion
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 to reach over 1.35
billion
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.
According to
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 the graph, the
population
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 in
India
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 will increase more quickly than in
China
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, and experts say that by 2030, both countries will have the same
population
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 of 1.45
billion
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.
After
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this
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,
China
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's
population
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 is likely to fall slightly to 1.4
billion
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 in 2050,
while
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India
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's
population
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 will probably increase and reach 1.6
billion
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.
Thus
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, over the 50-year period,
India
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 is going to experience steady growth in its
population
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 and it will overtake
China
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.
On the other hand
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,
China
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's
population
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 will peak in 2030 and
then
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 begin to fall

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, population, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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