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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to the closing of all shops in town and cities. Do you agree or disagree

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The technology revolution has huge impact, on the development of online shopping against retail
shop
, Spur the latter to
diminuend
exercising influence or control
dominant
diminished
 compared with before, in
this
 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss the advantages and drawback of online shopping compared with
retail store
Suggestion
a retail store
retail stores
. In one hand the online shopping has advantages from many angles,
firstly
 searching service that help
consumer
 to see all models/series ,and compare prices from many online web,
for example
 I used to purchase Cellphone accessories from online
shop
 at cheaper price ,
secondly
 shopping timing at comfortable time night or early Morning, and wherever you are either at home in train,…,
in addition
 to
this
 the online shopping allowed you see all comments from
consumer
 that use products, before you process the purchasing, and
also
 ability to buy goods from any country you would like,
for instance
 delivery terms of online shopping has possibility option door to door at short time, the only things that need to be clarified ,before starting the deal is the check the credibility of the
shop
 ,and returning process to avoid any complication later.
On the other hand
 retail
shop
 has obsession
consumer
,
Accept space
,
which the preferred the direct contact with sealer
,
Accept space
,
and checking and test products before purchase it, considering the possibility to take it as you pay for it, some store the change dispatch and delivered products to any place you want In overall the online shopping is opportunity and good income for many users and
consumer
Suggestion
consume
,
Accept space
,
 while the store retail full in direct charge like local charge and manpower and
lot
Suggestion
a lot
lots
 of competitions.

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