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Government should provide free public Transportation facilities 24/7 to reduce traffic congestion. To what extent do you agree or Disagree

#government #transportation #facilities #traffic #congestion
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In the present world
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the population of the people Is at its peak
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because of
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 the number of transportation is increasing rapidly
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thus
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 led to
traffic
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congestion
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moreover
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 led to the Increase in Co2
emmisions
the act of emitting; causing to flow forth
emissions
 in the surrounding.I support the statement that government should provide public
transport
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 just to control
traffic
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congestion
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 Analysing the advantages of public
transport
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, as well as the disadvantages of increase in
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 will
prove
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Prove
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 To commence with
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 there are several
reason
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reasons
 which points out the requirement of
public
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public vehicles
a public vehicle
vehicle
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Firstly
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 public
transport
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help
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helps
 us to reduce
traffic
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congestion
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 in that specific city.
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, the
use
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 of public vehicles minimizes the cause of co2
emmisions
the act of emitting; causing to flow forth
emissions
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, a city
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 as Delhi
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a major city in India) is covered with full of mist because of abundance of
transport
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, the only solution for
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 problem is the
use
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 of public
transport
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. On the other hand, just by introducing public
transport
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 does not reduce
traffic
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congestion
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 and pollution.
Therefore
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 the
use
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 of public vehicles should be made compulsory
such
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 as
use
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 of own
vehicle
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 in alternate days while in the remaining days we should
use
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 the public
vehicle
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.
Moreover
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, the
use
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 of Electronic cars
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bycycle
a wheeled vehicle that has two wheels and is moved by foot pedals
bicycle
bicycles
 should be recommended.
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 we must make the public understand the problems caused by
traffic
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congestion
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 by conducting awareness program in schools
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colleges etc. To summarize,
Traffic
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congestion
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 is one of the major issue throughout the world. Which can be solved by following certain rules
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thus
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 become apparent that the government should provide public
transport
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 to reduce
traffic
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congestion
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