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Government should provide free public Transportation facilities 24/7 to reduce traffic congestion. To what extent do you agree or Disagree

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The topic of traffic congestion is a very important concern for society at the moment. The way that providing free public
transportation
 contributes to reduce traffic congestion is one of
alternatives
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the alternatives
. We should start by taking a look at expense that
government
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the government
 must need to pay. It is
good idea
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a good idea
 that
government
provide
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provides
 free public transportations for 24/7. Because it will cause more commuters and citizens to use
transportation
instead
 of taking their individual cars and congestion will be reduced.
Nonetheless
, it would be covered by taxes and if more residents take
transportation
, expense will increase by chance.
Also there
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Also, there
 is a chance to argue by tax payers. Turning to the
second
 point view, it is helpful to the environment. The environmental pollution is caused by various reasons. One of various reasons can be the cars.
For instance
, Seoul, Capital city of South Korea, provided free
transportation
 for a day for better quality of air. As
result
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a result
, 2 times citizens used
transportation
 than usual and air pollution improved.
Therefore
, the
government
provide
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provides
 complimentary service that public transportations encourage to use public
transportation
 to citizens and will increase commuters. In conclusion, both arguments have strong arguments. The environment is not seen our
eyes but
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eyes, but
 definitely benefit every single of us.
Therefore
, I totally agree with that
government
 encourage to use
transportation
 by complimentary if
government
 provide proper time schedule and can support enough
financial
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financially
.
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.
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