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Some people think that having a set retirement age (say 65) for everybody regardless of occupation is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree ? What type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer.

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In the
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
 of certain people
,
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,
there should be no preset
age
 for
retirement
.They consider it
being
Suggestion
to be
 partial to have the
age
limit
 irrespective of the occupation.They put forth the idea that some workers can even retire early and continue to receive a pension.In my perspective, I personally do not support having an
age
limit
 for
retirement
.Not everybody will be able to
work
 until the
limit
 say 65, given the lifestyle and health conditions of
this
 modern era.It would be a hard pill for them as well as their family to
work
 until that
age
 to receive a pension
tahy
people in general
they
 may be of some support or help
to
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with
 their financial situation.Being aware of the deteriorating health and life span these days it doesn't really make sense to set an
age
limit
 for
retirement
. People should be given the freedom to retire whenever they want to.Early
retirement
 would mostly be suited to workers who are more into physical
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
,
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,
those that
work
 in manufacturing plants
,
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,
work
 with machineries, at construction sites or any other form of
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 that can be strenuous as compared to those who
work
 in
office
Suggestion
an office
-based environments or deal with administration.As humans
age
,
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,
 it may affect their productivity and strength irrespective of any
work but
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work, but
 mechanical
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 will show a drastic difference in the
work
 pace and efficiency. I believe these factory workers should be entitled to retire early.
Although
 it may be a fact that physical activity may boost the core strength of the body and it may be ironical to say they need to retire early, the truth is that
this
 technological
age
 does pose a serious threat to health. The life span has reduced to a
larger
Suggestion
large
 extent. For office-based workers there is not much physical exhaustion
competitively
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competitive
competition
. In recapitulation pension shouldn't be due a certain
retirement
age
,
Accept space
,
instead
 based on the nature of
work
 and experience.
This
 may ensure there is no misuse of funds provided.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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