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The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organization. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cultures #work #organization
I disagree with
this
 claim because working for a multinational
organization
 does make it easier to understand other cultures, but I don't think that's the best way. Obviously, a multinational
organization
 contains various of employers of different nationalities. Through
collabrating
work together on a common enterprise of project
collaborating
 with different
countries colleagues
Suggestion
countries, colleagues
country colleagues
country country colleagues
 in a multinational
organization
 could understand other cultures effectively. Good cooperation is based on a certain understanding of each other,
such
 as learn about their festivals, their customs, and how they celebrate. People of different nationalities who adopt different solutions to conflicts can
also
 reflect their cultural background. When people's emotions are out of control, they will more clearly show cultural characteristics in language and accent.
However
, it's significant for us to distinguish working office and study. In most cases, we rarely have the opportunity to communicate directly on cultures with each other in work situations. We tend to treat work in a more professional manner to maintain the normal operation of the
organization
.
Therefore
,
Therefore
, the vocabulary, clothing and festivals we use often cannot express the uniqueness of culture. Actually, people are often reluctant to talk about their cultural background with others, and even think that using
this
 as a topic of discussion is a violation of personal privacy.

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