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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: * Say why you would like to go on the trip * Suggest what you could do to help during the trip * Ask other questions about the trip

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I am writing to you in connection with a three-day school trip to another country. It sounds amazing to me that we as parents could be a part of
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 trip. It has been a long time, I did not meet teachers and other
student’s
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 parents in
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 a huge gathering. I hope
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 trip would give me an opportunity to know them better and I could make a few friends. Apart from that, I could spend an ample amount of time with many offsprings including mine.
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, I would like to mention that I am a guitarist and love to play music. When everyone would get tired after walking all day, my music might give them
serene
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 experience and they could feel relaxed.
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, I worked as an event manager in an organization where I had organized various events. I could aid staff
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 any kind of activity. As we are travelling abroad, many people might not familiar with the weather conditions. It would be great if you could inform us about the clothes and accessories that we should carry.
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, I would like to know about the on-site medical care centre facilities. I hope you could able to answer all my queries. I look forward to your reply. Yours Faithfully, Sneha

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enthusiastic
  • valuable experience
  • expertise
  • educational objectives
  • supervision
  • ensure safety
  • bonding
  • workshops
  • logistics
  • coordinates
  • travel arrangements
  • clear communication
  • support
  • responsibilities
  • manage schedules
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