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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think that is good. Others think that face-to-face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give our opinion.

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It is believed that social sites and chat groups are useful in making new friends
.W
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hile live meeting is necessary as compared to it. Social media sites have its own benefits.
First
 of all, it creates connectivity between people who stays at a longer distance. By using
internet
 chat groups and social platforms
,
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,
same age group, interest and occupation helps in getting match of each category.
Moreover
, it helps in promoting innovations in relevant
information
.
For instance
, there are a myriad of IELTS group on f
acebook,
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Facebook
 which are not only helpful by providing tips and s
trategies but
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strategies, but
also
 facilitates its members in speaking through mobile apps. Through
internet
 with a click of b
utton,
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a button
 sometimes ones can retrieve an authentic source regarding any
information
. A friend of mine was more interested to apply for immigration to Canada but he was unable to find any reliable channel, but one day while searching on
i
nternet
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the internet
he was able to find S
nober law firm
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a Snober law firm
in Canada, which proves to be really the best means for him. Despite of having these positive points, negative impacts are in the form of making fake accounts and fooling people all around the world is common now-a-days. By using other’s account and asking to transfer the amount in the accounts can easily track people
,
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,
even the police cannot detect them because they change I
P address
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the IP address
of c
omputer.
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the computer
a computer
On the other hand
, live communication has its own importance. People tend to prefer face-to-face interaction to produce empathy and v
alue
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the value
of relationships. So that new generation would know the importance and value of relations and should spend ample time together. In fast- paced life, we don’t spare time to o
thers that’s
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others, that’s
the main reason of living apart and unaware of p
roblems
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the problems
faced by others. There is no denying the fact that where social network sites have brought f
lood
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a flood
of
information
 through groups which are being made on
i
nternet.
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the internet
 Like online classes are provided to people far apart. My opinion is that, these social sites are the best source of
information
 in the form of groups

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