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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the number of
books
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 that were loaned out from four libraries over a
four month
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 period and the pie chart illustrates the proportions of
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 borrowed in terms of genre. It is immediately apparent that the borrowing patterns for each library were quite varied, and that fiction was by far the most popular type of book. The borrowing of
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 at Sutton Wood and Ryeslip began fairly high, at 250 and 300 per month in June respectively.
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 book borrowing at Ryeslip fell steadily to around 175
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 of the period, borrowing at Sutton Wood followed a much more erratic pattern. It plummeted to 100 in August, before
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 rising steeply to finish at 300, which represented the highest level of borrowing of the four. Borrowing at West Eaton and Church Mount, meanwhile, followed very similar patterns, with both starting quite low at 50 per month, but
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 gradually increasing to finish at 150. Moving on to the types of
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 borrowed, fiction was in demand the most, at 43%. The
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 most popular
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 were biographies, accounting for around a fifth of the total. The borrowing of science and history were identical, at 14% each, leaving self-help as the least popular at 10%.
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