Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports starts) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Every profession in the world has its own values, some give an enormous amount of money and fame, while others lack sponsorships and public attention.

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leads to the notions among masses that some celebrities are

over paid

pay too much

overpaid

, while the other’s stance is opposite. In my opinion, despite there are many other fields which deserve more money than Entertainers but considering a short

life

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cycle of their

career

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, and due to tough competition, they

are paid

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pay

a reasonable amount of money.

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with the number of stars around us, we can count them, they are not great in numbers. In fact, talking personally, if I begin to count Engineers or Accountants in our family, I can confidently say that there are 20 people belonging to these professions but no one is an actor or a cricketer.

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is because it needs enormous talent to qualify as being an entertainer. So it is completely justified to pay more for them, as there is a basic economic rule that says “low supply, high cost of buying”. Not only the talent, but another important aspect is the total years of their

career

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. An accountant can easily start working at the age of 18 and he can work till 60 years or possibly until retirement threshold set by the government;

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, he starts at low wage and continue to grow and earns maximum near his retirement.

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, celebrity

career

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age is short. A recent survey conducted by

International Cricket Council

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the International Cricket Council

(ICC) in 2019, where they reported average age of cricketer is between 24 years and 34 years, that means

peak

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the peak

a peak

of their monthly incomes will only be within these 10 years.

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means they should earn enough during

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period so that their

life

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economically stays viable after retirement. Contrary to above, there is a public debate that how Doctors are paid lesser

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then

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than

a TV actor? People believe that a person who spends most of his time on duty while caring patients, undoubtedly, must be compensated higher as compared to an actor who provides a few hours of entertainment. Though, we might find many opponents to

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rational, but still it carries a logic. In conclusion, despite a fact that there are many other professions which are not paid according to the efforts involved, we cannot draw their comparisons with Entertainers because of the variable years of

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. Due to the short

life

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cycle, Entertainers much earn enough that once they are out of the profession, they can live their

life

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with comfort.

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