many parents complain about violence promoted to their children through video games, tv programs and other media. Why is it happening? What can be the solution for it?

Learning is not inborn
infact
constituting the undiminished entirety; lacking nothing essential especially not damaged
intact
infected
infects
throughout the lifetime we learn. One's behaviour is determined by various factors like behaviour of parents, friends, society etc.
Now a days technology
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Nowadays, technology
Nowadays technology
is a very much important part of our lives. Everything has a two aspects one is good, others one is worst. In the same way with the advancement in technology, it makes communication easy, but on the other side it makes a person more violent. Invention of
vedio
the visible part of a television transmission
video
games makes children more lazy and lethargic. By spending more
time
in playing
vedio
the visible part of a television transmission
video
games
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
pay less attention and participate often in sports. With
this
kind of lack of physical
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
our future generation
become
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becomes
more overweight and obese. These
vedio
the visible part of a television transmission
video
games
also increses
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also increase
also increases
the mental stress among youngsters and they become
more impatience
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more impatient
, self-centred. They will not learn team spirit, coordination from theses games. Television is a source of entertainment for
families but
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families, but
to some extent. On an average a person should see 2-3 hours of television in a day. Commercials, serials, songs all have some kind of impact on a person. Advertisements like junk foods, smoking, alcohol or beverages put negative effect on youngsters. Mobile phones to some extent reduces the distances within the relatives, makes our life
more easy
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easier
. But
again it
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again, it
makes us more dependent. Our children
wants
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want
new phones with good camera qualities, they become more addicted towards phones and pay less attention towards studies. These
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
models
modes
also
welocome
accept gladly
welcome
welcomed
so many health related issues like
increase
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an increase
in stress, impatience, lack of activity can
leads
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lead
to obesity and overweight, decrease in eye sight, small children
wears
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wear
spectacles. With
this
people
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person
spends more
time
with phones and television that leads to less bondage and love among families, more broken families, stress etc. Families should spend more
time each other
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time with each other
. Children should be motivated for the outdoor sports. In
schools
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school
sports should be incorporated in the syllabus and
time
to
time
counselling should be provided to every child. Parents should motivate their children to ventilate their feelings. Legislation should work together regarding the content that
shoulod
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
be aired on televisions and what should not be.

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