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Learning is not inborn

infact

constituting the undiminished entirety; lacking nothing essential especially not damaged

intact

infected

infects

throughout the lifetime we learn. One's behaviour is determined by various factors like behaviour of parents, friends, society etc.

Now a days technology

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Nowadays, technology

Nowadays technology

is a very much important part of our lives. Everything has a two aspects one is good, others one is worst. In the same way with the advancement in technology, it makes communication easy, but on the other side it makes a person more violent. Invention of

vedio

the visible part of a television transmission

video

games makes children more lazy and lethargic. By spending more

time

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in playing

vedio

the visible part of a television transmission

video

games

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

pay less attention and participate often in sports. With

this

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kind of lack of physical

excercise

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

our future generation

become

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becomes

more overweight and obese. These

vedio

the visible part of a television transmission

video

games

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also increses

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also increase

also increases

the mental stress among youngsters and they become

more impatience

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more impatient

, self-centred. They will not learn team spirit, coordination from theses games. Television is a source of entertainment for

families but

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families, but

to some extent. On an average a person should see 2-3 hours of television in a day. Commercials, serials, songs all have some kind of impact on a person. Advertisements like junk foods, smoking, alcohol or beverages put negative effect on youngsters. Mobile phones to some extent reduces the distances within the relatives, makes our life

more easy

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easier

. But

again it

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again, it

makes us more dependent. Our children

wants

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want

new phones with good camera qualities, they become more addicted towards phones and pay less attention towards studies. These

medias

a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information

media

models

modes

also

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welocome

accept gladly

welcome

welcomed

so many health related issues like

increase

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an increase

in stress, impatience, lack of activity can

leads

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lead

to obesity and overweight, decrease in eye sight, small children

wears

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wear

spectacles. With

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people

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person

spends more

time

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with phones and television that leads to less bondage and love among families, more broken families, stress etc. Families should spend more

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time each other

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time with each other

. Children should be motivated for the outdoor sports. In

schools

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school

sports should be incorporated in the syllabus and

time

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time

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counselling should be provided to every child. Parents should motivate their children to ventilate their feelings. Legislation should work together regarding the content that

shoulod

expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something

should

be aired on televisions and what should not be.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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many parents complain about violence promoted to their children through video games, tv programs and other media. Why is it happening? What can be the solution for it?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that sports competitions are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore, youth should be banned from participating in sports competition. Do you agree or disagree?

Do you agree that the rise of artificial intelligence raises ethical concerns

Some people believe that cell phones should be for personal use only. others however feel cell phone should be used mostly for work. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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