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Nowadays we can see definite signs of surplus production in almost every industry sector, and this is leading to environmental damage. What are some possible solutions to this situation?

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The maps illustrate the previous (1930) and modern (2010) structure of Stokeford village. Overall, it is clear that the village retained some major elements as primary school and post office.
Conversely
, a few things vanished,
such
 as shops, farmlands, and gardens. In 1930 we can see that the village had a primary school, which developed more in 2010 due to the pressure of more people.
Besides
, there was a large house and gardens situated in 1930 and replaced by retirement housing in 2010.
Although
, the number of areas was covered by farmland on the east side of the river stroke and the bridge.
However
, those farming land was vanished entirely in 2010 due to housing development.
As a result
, more and more new houses and roads were built in modern times.
Moreover
, it was seen that in the 1930 period, some shops situated beside the post office and removed in current days. Interestingly, the post office stood in the same position in both periods, according to the of Stokeford.
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