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People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns?

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Most people living in larger areas are facing many problems in their daily
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am going to discuss my suggestions about it. Categorically speaking
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people living in larger areas face many issues in their
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noise pollution is one of the major
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problems
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 activities.Most of them living there are educated and professional.So they get disturbed in their way of living.They lack their concentration towards subject and sometimes their ideas may rapidly change due to noise.In
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people are subjected to be depressed and shows violent
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traffic, which
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causes
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people are not punctual to their work.It can cause trouble to the organization they work.Overall speaking
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people are
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forsaken by owner or inhabitants
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life
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. Government should enable numerous steps to tackle
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people should not stay towards the adjacent side of the city.The authority should organize and
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meet
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schools and
super market
a large self-service grocery store selling groceries and dairy products and household goods
supermarket
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for
 those issues.The factories produced
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people live in larger cities face many problems in their daily
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.The government should take several measures to tackle the problems.
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