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Q: Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is a movie called ‘
Life
 of Walter’. It’s about a man who works in the same organization for 20years on the same duty living in a bland
life
 without any thrills. One day Walter had to get out of his
perimeter
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perimeter, then
then
 encountered numerous adventures for the task and realizing about the true meaning of one’s
life
.
This
 movie gave me different perspectives of self-actualization. Having a
job
for
Suggestion
in
 your
life
 is like a journey, some pursue for the fixed destination and others take detours and they both still reach their goals. College graduates are often thrown into the real world without knowing anything about the
job
 even though how fancily they depict the
job
 description. Junior staffs will have no ideas of what to expect and what they are good at.
However
, there are more advantages for risk takers, they can eventually realize not only about their aptitudes
also
 strengths of and those insights will help people to choose the ideal
job
 only by having
variety
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a variety
 of experiences. With the above in mind, work for different organizations will make people broadly experienced on the
job
, people and lead to create their own initiatives for the goal. I believe quintessence of one’s
life
 can be enlightened only by changing the surroundings of our lives.

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