THE REASON THAT MOST INDIVIDUALS ARE IN DEBITS IS DUE TO THE OVERUSE AS WELL AS IRRESPONSIBLE USE OF CREDIT CARDS. BANKS SHOULD NOT ISSUE CREDIT CARDS UNLESS THEY ARE COMPLETELY SURE OF AN INDIVIDUAL’S ABILITY TO PAY BACK THEIR DEBITS.

It
is widely believe
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is widely believed
that
credit
cards
has helped
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have helped
people in many
cases but
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cases, but
on the other
hand putting
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hand, putting
them in debt and other terrible consequences. While
this
payment
method may bring some benefits to both individuals and banks,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
personally believe that it is necessary for the banks to check the
payment’s
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payment
history of each customer before letting them use
credit card
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a credit card
credit cards
.
First
, in order to avoid unexpected situations, it is better for banks
to make
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make
surveys and inquiries about their customers’ spending history before issuing them
credit
cards.
This
means, by completely sure about each
individuals
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individual
financial ability, it can decrease the chance of losing money. More than that, since some customers may overuse their
credit
cards to pay for
unnecessary but
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unnecessary, but
costly things, the banks may become bankrupt if having to pay for those items. So, it is beneficial
for
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to
the bank to make sure about their customer’s economic background before providing them
credit
cards.
For instance
, ACB or EXIMBANK now have
create
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created
many assessments to make sure about their customers’
payment
ability before issuing them
such
way of
payment
.
Moreover
, by restricting irresponsible individuals from the use of plastic money,
banks
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the banks
can eliminate social evils. In fact, many
credit
cards
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card
users
have became
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have become
criminals in order to find some money to pay for their loans. A case in point that Jamie, a well-known Instagramers, who claimed to be overuse her
credit
cards to purchase expensive clothes and cars, have been arrested for gambling.
This
means, it is
compulsary
required by rule
compulsory
to check the responsibility of each customer in order to avoid any bad consequences that may adversely affect the society. In conclusion,
although
credits
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credit
card may bring lots of benefits to both banks and consumers, I still believe that banks must make sure that their customers are responsible for their
payment
so as to avoid terrible consequences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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