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Some people prefer to be in the same kind of job their entire life, but others like to change their jobs frequently. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is a common belief that having the same jobs may not helpful to people
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ople with high positions should have a high level of understanding and good leadership. Because people who have accumulated a lot of experience and knowledge for a long day have developed these abilities, they are considered more qualified than those who have worked for a short period of age.
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, people prefer people who have the same job for a long life. To sum up, is same job, having better skills and can get promoted in their own field, For these reasons, I think that we have the jobs.

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