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The most important factor in job satisfaction is salary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#factor #job #satisfaction #salary
I don't completely agree with the statement, though, money plays a critical factor whenever an employee starts exploring the job options.
However
, it is not the only motivation to opt for a new working environment. There are several other variables which one needs to consider during the job search like job profile description, stability of the organization, perks and benefits involved, travelling percentage in your role, distance to the new office etc. These decisions are
also
 dependent on
invidual's
a human being
individuals
individual's
individuals'
 experience and state of mindset. If a person is looking to increase his wealth than a
knowledge
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knowledge, then
then
 usually they switch their jobs for money, whereas, I feel that should not be the priority of any person. Perhaps, he/she can focus on gaining the
skillset
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skill set
 required as per the industries and
then
 start applying. In
such
 cases, they will end up getting more packages even if they initiate with less.
Also
, policies created by the employers plays a crucial role in the lives of employees. If a person is not comfortable or finding it difficult to sync with the
office
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official
 rules
then
 there are
high number
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high numbers
 of chances that the employee will opt for a better place to excel his career. In the end, I would like to conclude that one should look for a relaxing environment along with benefits like flexible work timing, medical insurances, paid
leaves
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leave
, etc. It is equally important to ask for the number of employees working on the
companies
Suggestion
company
company's
 payroll, it reflects the financial stability of the organization. If these things are meeting with your
expectation
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expectation, then
then
 open yourself for salary negotiations.

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