Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centres. Do you think the advantage outweigh the disadvantages?

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quite said that if the multiple
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transferred in rural
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which would be good for
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are increasing day by day in the town sites.
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notion that the
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have to face
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if they move on to regional
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instead
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of urban centres. I concede that it will
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drawbacks
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if the bigger organisation build
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in the rural place. First and foremost, there are several arguments in favour of large industry set up
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regional
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side
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will be less when the big
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on to the
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companies
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garbage will be diminished which pollutes
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air. Eventually, to set up
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large industries in the
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opportunities.
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get more space to build their progress . Admittedly, there are some disadvantages if
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move on into the original
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will not get the producing raw materials at the proper time. Which would
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system.
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would be naturally affected by throwing industrial waste. Even,
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system of
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the country
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country
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side
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which
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is not good.
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, technology, fire
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and so on are not well in
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rural
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. In fact, rural
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road
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are too small.
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could not ride on the road, which will
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impact on the
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economically. To wrap up, I aptly believe that
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to move on the
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side
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areas
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can
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economically progress without threatening the environment.
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a large number of
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will
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the job facilities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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