The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining secound class degree or better at a major UK university. Summarise the infomation by selucting and reporting the main features.

The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining secound class degree or better at a major UK university. Summarise the infomation by selucting and reporting the main features.
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the figure
of
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UK
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student
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students
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attend
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a
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postgraduates
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or
master
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degrees in various types of
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in the year 2009. At first glance, both groups of students are interested
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differently
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types of
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in the
UK
university.
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liked to apply
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the field of Art history, Sociology
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the most. Both classes account for 80%. Nursing or English Literature represents the
second
popularity at approximately 75%, and International Law made up the
third
at 70%.
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Electrical Engineer was
least
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popularity
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merely at 65%.
Conversely
, Electrical Engineer was the
second
favourite for International at 8o%. The most popular class for
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students was Information Technology,
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the lowest percentage was
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Law.
However
, similar numbers of
UK
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scholar
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were equal in Nursing and Accountancy
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, at roughly 85% and 60% respectively. In summary,
UK
pupil likely attends
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theoretical
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the theoretical
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subject, but International student usually applied
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practical class and vice versa.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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