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The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining secound class degree or better at a major UK university. Summarise the infomation by selucting and reporting the main features.

The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining secound class degree or better at a major UK university. Summarise the infomation by selucting and reporting the main features.
#percentage #uk #students #secound #class #university #summarise #infomation #features
This
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about
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the figure
of
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UK
 and
foreigner
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student
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students
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who attend
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attend
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a
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postgraduates
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postgraduate
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 or
master
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 degrees in various types of
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the field
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field
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 in the year 2009. At first glance, both groups of students are interested
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differently
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 types of
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the subject
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subject
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 in the
UK
 university.
UK
student
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students
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 liked to apply
in
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 the field of Art history, Sociology
were
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the most. Both classes account for 80%. Nursing or English Literature represents the
second
 popularity at approximately 75%, and International Law made up the
third
 at 70%.
While
,
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 Electrical Engineer was
least
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popularity
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 merely at 65%.
Conversely
, Electrical Engineer was the
second
 favourite for International at 8o%. The most popular class for
foreigner
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 students was Information Technology,
meanwhile
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 the lowest percentage was
international
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International
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 Law.
However
, similar numbers of
UK
 and International
scholar
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scholars
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 were equal in Nursing and Accountancy
class
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classes
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, at roughly 85% and 60% respectively. In summary,
UK
 pupil likely attends
in
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theoretical
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the theoretical
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 subject, but International student usually applied
in
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 practical class and vice versa.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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