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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two bar
garphs
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graphs
 give information about British graduate and postgraduate students
which
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who
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 were involved in part-time
work
, voluntary
work
 ,
further
study
 and unemployment after completing their college in the year 2008.
Overall
, the number of postgraduate and graduate students
were
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was
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 the highest in
further
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the further
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study
while
 their number
were
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was
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 the lowest in voluntary
work
 in the year 2008. From the first chart, the number of postgraduate students for
futher
Correct your spelling
further
study
were
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was
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greatest
Correct article usage
the greatest
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,
that is
, 2725.
According to
 the
second
 pope, UK
student
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students
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 after completing their graduation planned for
further
study
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 was dose to 30,000 post- lime
Work
 and unemployment were almost some ( 17,735 and 16, 235 respectively).
Furthermore
, Voluntary
work
 was 3,500
2008
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in 2008
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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