Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

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The trend of current nuclear family with a single child or maximum two children has led to a different lifestyle than that of what we all have grown up. As a
part
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of joint family, we were always surrounded by kids and cousins to indulge in games and entertainment.
Currently due
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Currently, due
to our work demands and city life, children are not exposed to
gathering
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gather
with relatives and
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leads to a sedentary in-house routine rather than outdoor fun with other
piers
a person who is of equal standing with another in a group
peers
. In my opinion because of
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
and busy schedule of parents, I would encourage my kid to take
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in group activities and ensure to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
him
to
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in
classes of his interests
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as swimming, dance, music, martial arts and so on.
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will lead to
socializing
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socialized
, build trust with one another, respect and understand each other’s feelings.
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Also, this
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enhances physical fitness and they learn to become independent and confident to handle themselves without any support from their parents which is required for the present challenging world.
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, when children are not encouraged for group activities and allowed to be occupied
on
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with
their own they end up locked in a single room in front of TV, mobile or computers just playing games and watching videos.
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leads to solitary
confinement which
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confinement, which
in the near future might turn into rage due to loneliness and depression causing a bad impact on their development as they never learnt to be a
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of anyone around them. To summarize the importance of the situation, it is best advisable for parents to cheer their little ones to play outside the house, mingle with their friends, and be a
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of the group activities in order to build a strong and healthy relationship that would in turn make our children the best individual in the society.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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