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Nowadays, families move to different countries for work. Some people think it has a negative effect on children, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are several reasons why people want
to going
Suggestion
to go
 abroad. Some of these are but not limited are Job opportunities, comfortable life and learning new cultures.
Firstly
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, one of the reasons, why they choose
live
Suggestion
to live
 in other countries is job opportunities.
For instance
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, there is no easy way find
job
Suggestion
jobs
 in a
country
Use synonyms
 which in middle-east.
In addition
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 to that, even Professionals find a something for make Money, they probably could not. Employers do not give
enogh
as much as necessary
enough
 Money for
employee
Suggestion
employees
the employee
.
On the other hand
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, humans would find
job
Suggestion
jobs
 without university education due to the fact that body strong is vital for building industries.
Secondly
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, another reason why people consider about going overseas
contries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
 is comfortable life. To give an example, if there are very much political
sentetive
responsive to physical stimuli
sensitive
 in your
country
Use synonyms
 and you do not like to politics, you should move on to countries which is
embrace
Suggestion
embraced
 to
immigrates
Suggestion
immigrate
.
Moreover
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, if
u
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
you you
allinated
terminate, end, or take out
eliminated
allocated
 to your living place, you cannot live in there anymore. In spite of everything, you would not feel safety in foreign
langeuage
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
languages
 spoken countries.
Lastly
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, the other reason why a person wants to move to a
country
Use synonyms
 which has
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
culters
a particular society at a particular time and place
cultures
cutters
 is learning new cultures. By way of illustration, a person cannot pick his or her hometown. He or she would be in unusual ideas for his or her
country
Use synonyms
.
It
Suggestion
It's
 like
this
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, a girl could be an atheist in her
hometown but
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hometown, but
 if her relatives are bigot, she cannot feel comfortable in
muslim
of or relating to or supporting Islamism
Muslim
 cities. In conclusion, People want to go abroad for these reasons,
altough
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
 there are a few
diffucult
not easy; requiring great physical or mental effort to accomplish or comprehend or endure
difficult
 sides.
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