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Cash or credit card ? Which is good to use. Present your views

#cash #credit #card
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Todays topic is
cash
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 or
credit
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card
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.
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.
 I am going to present my view on
this
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 topic. While we have different payment options like cheque,
cash
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,
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,
net banking,
credit
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 cards, which
one
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 is better depends on
one
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's preferences.I strongly agree that
credit
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card
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 is
one
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 of the best ways to save money and
mint
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Mint
reward
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are rewarded
 coins. In
this
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 digitised world, everything is going by
credit
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.
Firstly
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,
credit
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card
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 was launched by American Express in
year
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the year
 1970 in USA. People were sceptical to
use
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 it.
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However in
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However, in
last
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 40 years,
credit
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card
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industry
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The industry
Industry
 has seen 200% growth rate.
This
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 is self evident that
credit
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card
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 is the leader in the payment industry and why not
?
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?
 It is the only payment method where banks have been giving you interest free
credit
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 for 51 days. You earn free reward points and have the benefit of buying other goods using those points.
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, it will not be a complete lie, that
credit
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card
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 has increased the greed in human beings. We often buy things for the sake of getting reward points. For those who don't pay their dues on time, banks impose a heavy penalty and often they went bankrupt because of excessive
use
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. On the other hand,
cash
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 has its benefits. It can be used anywhere and everywhere. Old people who are not familiar with
credit
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 cards can
use
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 them easily.Some places
dont
do not
don't
 have swipe machines working,
cash
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 can be used readily. You will be in
big mess
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a big mess
 if you purchased something and
machine
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the machine
 is not working.
Cash
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 is the ultimate solution. But it has its disadvantages too. It can be steeled or looted from you.
This
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 is not the case with
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Credit
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a Credit Card
Card
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.
Its
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It's
prettysafe
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pretty safe
. In summary,
one
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 should
use
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Credit
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card
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 only if they can pay their dues on time. If you are getting greedy, please
dont
do not
don't
use
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this
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 mode.
Be
money in the form of bills or coins
Cash
tter to have
cash
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 and spend it wisely

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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