The importance of academic subjects as compared to extracurricular activities is increasing everyday. Some people suggest that spots calsses should be sacrifice in high school so student can concentrate on academic subjects.

Nowadays High schools are giving equal priorities to extracurricular activities and academics.
Therefore
,
Accept space
,
it is an excuse that
come
Suggestion
comes
from some people that sports classes has to be banned in high schools so students can focus on their
study
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studies
.
However
, I personally
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
belief
believed
that getting rid of sports classes it is not really
convicing idea
Suggestion
a convincing idea
convincing idea
to deal with.
Firstly
, sports classes are necessary in student's life.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
ssports
an active diversion requiring physical exertion and competition
sports
classes can be a
relaxation
Suggestion
relaxing
time for students to have
break
Suggestion
broken
from
hectic schedules
Suggestion
the hectic schedules
of academic subjects. Students can play various games and or sports during that
time which
Accept comma addition
time, which
can improve their physical fitness.
Furthermore
,

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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