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Task 2: Some people believe tat the activities of large multinational corporations mostly benefits the economies of developing countries. Other people take the opposite view and feel that these large multinationals are generally harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Now a days
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Nowadays
, most of the people prefer to
work
 in
multinational organisation
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a multinational organisation
instead
 of
domestic process
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the domestic process
.Our society is polarised into two groups almost equally regarding both the notions that myriads of people suggest that activities which is done by international corporations has profound impact on
country
developement
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
developments
,
however
,
rest
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the rest
 of the people think that it is harmful.Different people
has
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have
 distinct mindset.In
this
 essay, we would elucidate both the approaches along with my personal perspective. To commence with the
first
 notion, some people claim that large organisation has positive growth of countries.
Firstly
, people
get
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gets
 big platform where different people of another
country
work
 and share views.Masses not only
work but
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work, but
also learn
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also learns
 a plethora of things
such
 as
differnt
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 languages, culture and religion which has a directly helps in the
developement
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
 of
country
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the country
a country
.After learning these skills they do
praticle
(nontechnical usage) a tiny piece of anything
particle
practical
 so society watch them
,
Accept space
,
which has
profoud
showing intellectual penetration or emotional depth
profound
proved
imapct
the striking of one body against another
impact
in
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on
 overall
growthof
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growth of
country
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the country
a country
.
Secondly
, activities which
is doing
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are doing
 in these type of organisation helps the people to think about
better future
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a better future
, learn different languages so they easily migrate to
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 countries and bright their future very easily
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they do not face language barrier as well as they get lucrative wages.I would quote an epitome that
last
 year the
hindustan
northern region of India where Hinduism predominates
Hindustan
 newspaper conducted a survey for finding the masses who agree to
work
 with a big platform and they migrate people freely to another
country
, so it is beneficial for
economy
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economic
 growth. Shifting towards the
second
 notion
,
Accept space
,
a plethora of people
suggest
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suggests
 that it has
detrimental effect on
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a detrimental effect on a country
a detrimental effect on country
detrimental effects on country
country
 because it directly reduces the small scale business so more and more masses are not able to survive.
Furthermore
, according to the people offsprings and individual of our
country
 learn bad habits
such
 as different culture which not only impact the society but
also
 provide hindrance in growth.
Besides
this
, if more and more masses are connected with them, the no high skills person
think
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thinks
 about their own
country
 they always prefer their activities and their religion. Hammering the
last
 nail, after
discussed
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discussing
 both arguments and counter arguments,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to
opinion
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opine
 that activities or skills help in
hone
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honing
 the economy so it has more
prons
any of various edible decapod crustaceans
prawns
prunes
brains
instead
 of harm.People get
better carrier opportunity
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a better career opportunity
a better carrier opportunity
 and learn
numerious
amounting to a large indefinite number
numerous
 things which help them in certain ways if they practice that and
socity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
also
 gets benefited.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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