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The world of work is rapidly changing and the employees cannot depend on having the same job or the same working conditions for life. Why is the case? Can you suggest some ways to prepare people to work in the future?

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The worldwide occupation is changing at a rapid speech and employees are not reliable on the similar
work
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 or the constant working conditions for the whole life. The reasons behind
this
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 case will be outlined in the following essay and giving some suggestions for people to be ready for their careers in the long run. There are two reasons why w
orkers
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the workers
have to experience various kinds of jobs and working environment these days.
Firstly
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, the p
rolification
growth by the rapid multiplication of parts
proliferation
of advanced technologies and the leap development of artificial intelligence makes human not catch up with in terms of
work
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 e
fficency
the ratio of the output to the input of any system
efficiency
and productivity, as a consequence, they are out of
work
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.
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, many companies and organizations, which want to maximum the profits for themselves, cut down on the human resources as much as possible.
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also
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 leads to the significant reduction in the salary of their staff and the loss of
work
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 as well.
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, there are a number of ways that people can prepare for changes in their workplaces in the future.
To begin
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 with, should high- school graduates b
e
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are
e
quiped
provided or fitted out with what is necessary or useful or appropriate
equipped
with career orientation while studying, they will p
ersue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
their interests and have the best preparations for their upcoming job. In the
second
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 place, the employees had better update to the knowledge relating to the technology and the innovation on a r
egularly
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regular
b
asic
a relation that provides the foundation for something
basis
in order to easily adapt to the modification of the current occupation. All in all,
although
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 there are many changes in the workforce nowadays, educating people to carefully choose their career and to keep updated with modern technology, is the key to avoiding any main problems.

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