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the graph below shows information how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant. you should write at least 150 words.

the graph below shows information how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant. you should write at least 150 words.
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The chart gives information about the amount of money that
city
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the city
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 council has given to the libraries and the number of book club members. From
year1
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year 1
 to
year2
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year 2
 the amount of money that the council has given increased slightly and in
year3
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year 3
 it has a sharp rise and reached
to
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apply
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a peak and after
that
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,that
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 it fell down in
year4
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year 4
.
On the other hand
; The number of book club members at first had a slight decrease and
then
 increased till
year4
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year 4
 and reached
to
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apply
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12000
persons
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people
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.
Overall
; The amount of money
spend
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spent
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for
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on
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 libraries had fluctuations, but the number of members after a slight decrease had
upward
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an upward
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 trend.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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