the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

the bar chart below shows the top ten countries

for the production and consumption 

of electricity in 2014
In today's world,
images
in the form of photographs, films and pictures are used everywhere as a means of communicating with the public. I
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agree that
such
images
have become a very powerful means of communication and they are used in many different sectors to influence, inform and entertain the public. The media,
for example
, use
images
to give detailed information and immediate impact to their news coverage.
Similarly
, advertising industries constantly use
images
to influence, persuade and make people identify with what they see. The powerful attraction of
images
is
also
evident in the entertainment industry and even in the growth in mobile phones that can send photos as part of a regular personal 'conversation'.
However
,
while
it is evident that the image has certainly become a very powerful way of communicating,
that
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it
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not
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to say that it has become more powerful than either the written or spoken word.
Images
can be interpreted in a range of different ways, and because of
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they are rarely used alone. Captions, headlines and written explanations or spoken commentaries almost always accompany the use of
images
, whether they are used in advertising or the media. Used alone, the message of a picture can be notoriously misleading
,
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and is less effective
as a result
. In conclusion,
therefore
, I only partly agree with the statement.
While
it is true that
images
can send very powerful messages, they are only really effective as a means of communication when used
together with
either the written or spoken word.
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