Gender imbalance has long been a general phenomenon not only in the labour market but also in formal education. Some analysts argue that it is impossible to eliminate the underrepresentation of women in some subjects in the university. Do you agree or disagree?

Of those issues that have concerned the world,
gender
discrimination has been one of the most prominent over the centuries. On some occasions, females are still underrepresented in tertiary
institutions despite
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institutions, despite
their high academic abilities. Never will it be possible to create
gender
-fair
environment according
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environment, according
to some people. I disagree with
this
notion. It is not secret that women are more intelligent and adaptive than men. Innate strengths and intelligence of females stand them in good stead in many fields.
For example
, female teachers are believed to be better in a teaching process due to their kind disposition and high perception. Or in the past,
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an army
the army
was deemed as a male-oriented sphere, yet now, because of high
technological
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technology
advances, women made already some inroads into
this
field, and now the are an integral part of the army.
Therefore
, in order to prepare highly qualified personnels,
gender
inequality in universities must be eliminated, enabling female students to acquire appropriate knowledge and replace the workers in the above mentioned jobs. It was proven by many scientists that people are
prob
feeling self-respect or pleasure in something by which you measure your self-worth; or being a reason for pride
proud
probe
to work or study harder and better, provided that they collaborate with opposite sexes. For insurance, boys and girls used to study separately in the Middle ages. Only after
then
, when students started to be taught together, did the world witnessed breakthroughs. Considering
this
, it is time
gender
discrimination eliminated, and balance men and women established, letting girls study without any kind of obstacles at universities. As shown above, keeping
gender
prejudice and favouritism is impossible anymore due to women intelligence and the demand of human
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. In the near future,
gender
discrimination will totally fade away.

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