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Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach art subjects, like philosophy and history, and only practical degree courses that maximises chances of employment. To what do you agree or disagree?

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Due to increasing university fees and inadequate employment opportunities for graduates, people are of the opinion that the universities should offer more of the practical subjects, than teaching art subjects
such
 as philosophy and history.I agree with the statement as practical subjects will help them to
percieve
to become aware of through the senses
perceive
 the business world. A real world is
ver
used as an intensifier
very
ever
 complex in nature and to get employment in
such
 a dynamic and competitive environment is a very difficult task.In order to get a person is required to have a good practical knowledge.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
In business firms, they hire a person who had a practical experience.
Also
, these art subjects
such
 as philosophy and history, provides knowledge regarding the past events
(
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(
like what people thought
r achieve
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achieves
are achieve
 during 1990's).These subjects do not teach us about what
actuaaly
in actual fact
actually
 is happening today in your world.These subjects only provide one time knowledge till exams and once the exams are over
,
Accept space
,
the person forgets everything.But
on the other hand
, if a student is given a practical exposure there are more chances of retaining information for longer time.
For instance
, it has observed that 95% of the people are able to retain information for
longer period
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longer periods
a longer period
 when they see a particular thing being practically done. To sum up
,
Accept space
,
I strongly believe that the universities
shuld
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 introduce practical courses so that individuals are well aware of the reality and
also
 to increase their chances of employment.

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