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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask other about the trip

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My name is Ramani Ramakrishnan and mother of Aadhi who is studying 3rd grade in your school. I am writing
this
 letter to express my interest in the
three day
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 school trip. I would join
with
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you on
this
 trip because of my son's sickness. He had an injury on his leg two months ago and had a minor operation. For
this
 reason, he needs someone's help to take care of him.
Also
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 I have worked as
child
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a child
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care taker
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caretaker
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 for three years. In
this
 way, I can help you by taking care of all the children in every possible way
such
 as ensure children's playtime, organize mealtimes, supervise children's activities and monitor their safety. I have a question about
this
 trip. As a parent, do I need to have any specific skills? Please get back to me as early as possible. It helps me to get ready. Looking forward to
hear
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 from you. Thank you.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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