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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of
water
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 used for industrial, agricultural, and domestic
use
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.
Overall
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, in
Asia
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water
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 is mostly used for agricultural purposes.
On the other hand
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, in North America and
Europe
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,Europe
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water
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 is mainly used for industry. As presented in the graph North America uses the highest percentage of
water
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 in
industry
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the industry
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 which is
at
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apply
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48
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percent
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per cent
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. Followed by, agricultural
used
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use
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 and domestic
used
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use
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 which are at 39 and 13
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percent
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per cent
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, respectively.
Similarly
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 in Europe, 53
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percent
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per cent
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 of
water
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 is used for industry and 32
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percent
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per cent
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 uses for agriculture.
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Lastly
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 only 15
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percent
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per cent
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 is domestic
use
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.
In addition
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, in
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Africa
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,Africa
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 the highest percentage of
water
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is
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is used
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use
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 for agricultural
purpose
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purposes
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followed by domestic
use
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 and industrial
use
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 which is at 19 and 10
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percent
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per cent
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,respectively. In fact, In
Africa
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, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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, Central
Asia
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 have the highest
use
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 of
water
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 for agriculture, which is at 88
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percent
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per cent
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 followed by
Africa
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 and South East
Asia
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 which are at 84 and 81
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percent
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per cent
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, respectively. In these three
countries
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,countries
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 South East
Asia
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 has the highest
used
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use
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 of
water
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 for industrial
use
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 which is at 12
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percent
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per cent
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 followed by
Africa
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 and Central
Asia
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 which is at seven and five
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percent
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per cent
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, respectively.
Furthermore
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,
Africa
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 has the highest
used
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use
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 of
water
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 for domestic
use
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 followed by
central
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Central
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Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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, which
use
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 the same amount of
water
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 which is at seven
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, asia, percent, africa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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