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One hundred adults, boys and girls in Manchester,England were asked to name the sports they participated in. The results were recorded in the following stacked bar chart.

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The stack bar chart gives information about the responses which based on five types of
sport
participation
 from three different categories and each survey has one hundred people who live in Manchester, England. It is clear that boys take part in
sport
 activities is the highest proportion of total interviewees. In terms of the number of
sport
participation
, swimming is significantly more popular than football and basketball among all groups. A vast majority of boys favour in swimming around 60 people in total, while the number of boys who take part in hockey is the least among all types of activities.
However
, the girls received the highest proportion of participating in hockey approximately more than 50 people. While most of girls prefer to play hockey, football is not the popular choices in their group, approximately less than 10 out of 100.
Furthermore
, It is noticeable that adults are interested in swimming and tennis, while the
participation
 of other
sport
Suggestion
sporting
 activities is less than 10.
Also
, adults and girls have the same number of
participation
Suggestion
participations
 in tennis and football activity.

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