The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The illustration demonstrates the steps in the
food
manufacturing process in the United States of America.
Overall
, it is a 6 stage, man-made, linear process. It begins with the delivery of the
cow
and
finally
produced
beef
food
products
for human consumption. The
cow
is delivered by ship
in
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the production area and kept
to
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a nearby building for storage, and feeding. After that, in the processing building, the
cow
is examined for
food
safety procedures for human consumption and
then
slaughtered to produce raw
cow's
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meat. The
beef
meat is
then
cut into different sizes and classifications and
then
packed
according to
the desired packaging standard. Following that, the packed
beef
products
are placed in the distribution building ready for delivery. From
this
, the trailer truck transports the
beef
products
to the restaurant and retail store. By
then
, the restaurant chef,
as well as
the home cook, prepares
beef
food
products
.
Finally
, the delicious
beef
meal is served
in
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the
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family dining and restaurant customers.
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