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Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main sources in many countries, but in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy (wind energy and solar energy) are encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In some nations, crude oils are considered as the main
resources whereas
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resources, whereas
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,] in other countries, they believe in the different
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had
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impact] on human life and [the
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environment.In
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few countries are supplying fossil fuels to all over the world and soon the resources will get exhausted due to
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the high
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and further
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, all flights are replenished with petrol as [A
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source
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energy
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the air
. Soon the fuel
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 is going to get exhausted and it may affect the air transportation.
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the benefit
 of using natural
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 is to avoid air pollution in industries and transportation. The alternative
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 as wind and solar gives a pollution free environment and
theyare
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they are
renewableenergy
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renewable energy
 which can produce the
source
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 of fuels for the huge population without any demand.
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step forward to increase the production of
solar powered vehicle
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solar powered vehicles
a solar powered vehicle
 to provide pollution free nation and avoid the dependences of non-renewable resources like oil and natural gases.
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, switching to the alternate
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energy
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 is mandatory to pursue. In conclusion, moving to the alternative
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 of
energy
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such
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 as wind and solar is a positive development because it supports nature
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eco-friendly and can be
regenerate
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regenerated
. Whereas, fossil fuels will get exhausted at one point and cannot be renewable
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