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The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this?

#production #consumer #goods #results #damage #environment
Nature is an integral part of our lite. It is a blessing that God
bestow
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bestows
 on us. Natural provide us with the dramatic increase of goods, the natural is deteriorating at a very fast rate. On the one hand, the world's population is increasing day by day, which is one of the reasons for pollution. As the growth of population, we aren’t using natural resources. It’s believed that nothing can save when a human change their mind about safe their life environment. The industrial activities are a way to cause the air pollution and water pollution, which would damage the marine and terrestrial animals. The fact that deforestation to get the wood to make the furniture would lead to the soil erosion. There is some the solution of goods consuming, the politicians impose punishment on companies that harm to the environment during the production process.
On the other hand
, oil exploitation is a way to depletion of natural resources. Some famous brands of drink started an activity that the drink will be discounted if the costumer bring their own cup. There are very good idea for reducing the food in plastic and raise awareness for the residents, which encourage them using eco-friendlier product. To conclude, government and peple need to join a hands to manufacturing process more environmentally friendly

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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