The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices are harmful to individual and to the society they live in. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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The debate on video games has been going on since they
first
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introduced to the public. Some people think video games are an enjoyable form of entertainment while others are strongly against them due to
games
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game
addiction and its consequences. In my opinion, video games are can be
harmful but
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harmful, but
they can bring benefits to people and the society as well.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • screen time
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • social isolation
  • interpersonal skills
  • violent content
  • desensitizing
  • cognitive benefits
  • hand-eye coordination
  • problem-solving skills
  • educational value
  • stress relief
  • emotional well-being
  • social connections
  • portable entertainment
  • global communities
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