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You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter: - explain your situation - describe your problems - tell him/her when you think you can start Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#job #week #employer #situation #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir, how are you? I think I might skip my
first
 month of
job
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, because of my health. I have
serious
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 illness. The doctor told me that, it is a good idea to have an operation
to
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 my
heart
 quickly. I have to change my
heart
. The results of analyze
was
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 ready yesterday. So I am writing
this
 letter at night. Lucky me I found the person who would give me his
heart
. He
also
 has
serious
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ache
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. He is already ready to give his organ.
This
 situation is too difficult for me. But I every time felt that something
wrong
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 with my
heart
. Tomorrow I am going to fly to
US
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the US
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.
This
 month I will spend my time in
US
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 with my family.
That is
 going to be my
first
 time
to
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flying by
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plane
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plain
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plane
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 to another country. There we will solve
this
healthy
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 issue.
This
 summer I planned to travel to London.
This
 challenge changed my life. I never thought that
,
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 I will fly to another country because of my health. I cannot wait to work with you.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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