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Some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion?

#countries #money #bicycle #usage #traffic #congestion
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Immensely increasing
pollutions
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pollution
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 is
concern
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 nowadays. In order to overcome
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 phenomenon, developing countries are trying to put a tremendous amount of money
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 spreading awareness among the
people
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for
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usages
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usage
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 of
the
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bicycles
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.
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 essay will attempt in order to agree with the statement that it is a considerably inevitable solution. As it is widely accepted that, non-renewable sources of energy are at extinction,
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 as
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 fossil fuel. One should consider alternative options. As mentioned before, by hiking
use
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the use
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 of
bicycles
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 it becomes easier to resolve
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. Developing countries are spending a handsome money
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explaining
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the advantages of
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no
fuel needed
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 vehicles to the community. The reason behind
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 is to develop a clear breathable environment and reduce harmful chemicals and gases like Carbon monoxide. It
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 helps to improve
health
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the health
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 of
people
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 and less expenditure on medical supplies.
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, it should lead to
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the
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one of the most important traffic problems. It has been proved that
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 countries accessing
bicycles
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 and other alternative travel options are having the minimum air pollution. The best illustration of
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 is
USA
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the USA
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 country,
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people
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where people
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 use chargeable
bicycles
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 to go to and from work to avoid traffic.
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, it has
claimed
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people
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 who use the bicycle have more immunity and physical health.
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, it can be said that, to improve health and
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fresh
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 environment one should consider the option of
suing
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using
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bicycles
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 which can reduce traffic problems as well.
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