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Some business observe that new employees who just graduated from a college or university seem to lack interpersonal skills needed for communication with their colleagues. What could be the reason for this? What solution can help address this problem?

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After
copletin
acting as or providing a complement (something that completes the whole)
completing
graduation joining
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graduation, joining
 in a job as an employee is really a new
jouny
the act of traveling from one place to another
journey
 of life
to
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for
 everyone. It is not abnormal for someone
tho
in the direction of
to
 feel uncomfortable in a new and at the same time a formal environment. So it seems to me that lack of interpersonal
communicaion
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
 skills among fresher is not a great problem and it can be solved.
My
the month following April and preceding June
May
 be there are a lot of causes behind the lack of interpersonal skills among fresher which are necessary for interactions with their colleagues.
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Firstly I
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Firstly, I
 want to mention the nervousness that works
in
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on
with
 everyone when he or she comes in a new and unfamiliar environment. Gradually
this
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 problem can be solved. The
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 reason is incorporated in our education system. Most of the college or university prioritize on
theoritical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
 knowledge only specially in forms of business, art and social
scienc
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
science
sciences
scenes
 faculty.
That is
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 why students
can not
can not
cannot
 achieve any kind of interpersonal skills are needed for an organized official system.
Thirdly
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, students in the contemporary society pass most of the time of a
da
time for Earth to make a complete rotation on its axis
day
 in online that means internet, computer, mobile and so on.
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Consequently they
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Consequently, they
 are getting expert in virtual
communicaion
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
 rather
the real
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the reality
 or face to face communication. Even if we notice we can see that when the youngsters get
togather
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
 in real life they emphasize on someone who is
onlin
on a regular route of a railroad or bus or airline system
online
only
in
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with
 their mobile screen. I think it is one of the most significant reasons to disrupt interpersonal communication of new employees. To solve
this
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 problem each
organizaion
a group of people who work together
organization
organisation
 can arrange a training programme for its new employee. I hope it can help to develop their
communicaion
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
 skills. Except
this
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 an orientation program can
also
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 help to interact with one another.
In addition
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, our education system can prioritize on applied knowledge and different extra curricular activities like debate, group work and so on. If above mentioned activities can be applied, I hope communication skills of
new employee
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new employees
the new employee
 will increase. I will suggest individual
also
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 involve themselves
diffirent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
types
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type
 group activities to remove
this
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 lacking.

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