Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what ef ects does this have on animal life and human society?

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Environmental
pollution
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is one of the major concern
that is
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affecting the quality and
productive
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productivity
production
productiveness
of livestock farming.
Water
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pollution
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is another aspect which is caused by poor drainage system and ignorant of people
as a result
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having negative effect on animals and humans as a whole. To start with, considering the causes of these
water
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pollution which
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pollution, which
as lead to a
great
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greater
impact on
human
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humanity
.
Firstly
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, the construction of the
water
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channel is bad. Most pathway
are poorly built
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is poorly built
which as lead to erosion to nearby river banks and seashore.
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, there is
lack
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a lack
of proper maintenance of
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such pathway
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such a pathway
.
Additionally
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, people
tends
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tend
to
dumb
throw away as refuse
dump
refuse into the flowing
water
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which in turn leads to blockage of the
water
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system.
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, ignorant on the part of the
people
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people, for
for example
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, people believe that once it is raining its an opportunity to dispose all their waste products inside the river or streams.
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of
this
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habit,
its
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it
causes harm to aquatic habitat. The impact of
such
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action on animal life and human can't be over emphasized. The effects
on
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of
this
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habitat is more and disastrous
such
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as suffocating and killing
such
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animals due to the waste been dumped inside the rivers and seas.
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,
its
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it
leads to low quality and production of fishes.
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, oil spillage on
this
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water
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surface leads to
uncondusive
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environment. The impact on human leads to increase in the sales of those
animals thereby
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animals, thereby
making
its
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it
difficult to purchase.
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,
its
the thing named or in question
it
leads to
scacrity
a small and inadequate amount
scarcity
of fishes leading to low amount
been
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is
available for sales. In conclusion, the consequences of
water
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pollution
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is more dangerous than its benefits.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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