The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The graphs explain
about
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the
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computer
ownership
in terms of
percentage
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the percentage
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of
population
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the population
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between the years 2002 to 2010 and
shows
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show
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the
ownership
on
bases
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the bases
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of the
level
of
education
for the
year
2002 and 2010.
Overall
, it is clear from the first
graph
, that
the
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apply
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computer
ownership
have
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increased substantially from the
year
2002 to 2010.
For example
, in 2002 the
percentage
of
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was approximately 55%,
whereas
it increased to 75% in the
year
2010. But
in
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the below
graph
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it explains
about
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different levels of
educations
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education
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and the
ownership
of
the
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a
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computer
. The
education
level
is ranging from no high school diploma to
postgraduate
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a postgraduate
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qualification
. It is evident from the
graph
that students with no high school diploma own
less
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fewer
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computers than
the
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apply
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students with
postgraduate
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a postgraduate
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qualification
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qualifications
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. It is noticeable
form
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from
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the first
graph
that the
ownership
for
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of
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the
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apply
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computer
have
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has
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gradually increased with
the
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apply
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time, in the
year
2002 the
ownership
percentage
was less than 60%, and in two
year
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years
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we could see a growth of more than 10%,
that is
in 2004 the
ownership
has an increase up to 60
percentage
.
Subsequently
, the growth has been constant till 2010, And when we compare the percentages
of
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from
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2002 to 2010, we notice a 2/5 increase in the
percentage
of
the
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apply
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ownership
. The
second
graph
explains about two time periods
that
is
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are
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between 2002 and 2010. It explains
about
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the
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apply
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computer
ownership
based on the
level
of
education
. As the
level
of
education
increases the
ownership
of
the
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apply
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computers
increase
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increases
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as well. The
ownership
of the computers
in
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is
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also
dependent
of
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on
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the time
periods
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period
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. When we focus on the
level
of
education
where the student did not have a high school diploma, the
percentage
of students in 2002 was comparatively low than
2010
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in 2010
show examples
. It is the same situation with all
the
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apply
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educational levels. The highest
percentage
of
ownership
was for
postgraduate
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a postgraduate
show examples
qualification
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qualifications
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. And the highest
percentage
for both
the
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apply
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year
were
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was
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noticed to be in the same educational
qualification
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, ownership, percentage, level, education, year, graph, qualification with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "explain" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • computer ownership
  • percentage of the population
  • level of education
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • no-qualification
  • secondary
  • post-secondary
  • graduate education
  • digital divide
  • socio-economic factors
  • technological advancement
  • accessibility
  • demographics
  • statistical data
  • data interpretation
  • significant growth
  • fluctuations
  • proliferation
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